Bittersweet Independence

So small, I effortlessly remember
Promises to always provide the answer
Assumptions He’ll permanently call for me
Years pass quickly and I see
Bittersweet Independence
He doesn’t need me; He can reach
He doesn’t need me; He can make his own
He doesn’t need me; He’s a big boy now

Weekly Writing Challenge: Fifty

 

20 thoughts on “Bittersweet Independence

    1. Thank you very much, I appreciate the feedback. This is the very first piece of poetry I have attempted. I’m sure I possibly broke all the rules – but I feel this has opened the door & I’m excited. 🙂 Happy Friday!

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  1. Awesome, AWESOME piece! Clearly, poetry is yet another one of your many talents. It had beautifully flowing rhythm, and I became more intrigued with every line. I think the title perfectly captures the poem and I could truly feel the quiet pride behind the poem. This was absolutely beautiful.

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    1. Ahhh, you make my heart happy; Thank you so much! I really appreciate the input – seeing as I felt like I was 100% winging it. I attempted to google, “How To Write a Poem” – (for real…) and quickly became overwhelmed. Closed google out and just wrote & it felt good – and here we are. First poem done. 🙂 Thank you for your inspiration!

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      1. I’m glad I could make your Monday a little brighter. It really is an awesome poem- I just had to tell you! I love the story about googling it- Don’t be ashamed! I’ve googled some pretty embarrassing things…And seriously, you are an amazing poet, especially for your first attempt! 😀

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